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The table below shows expenditures on advertising of four car companies in the UK in 2002.

The table below shows expenditures on advertising of four car companies in the UK in 2002.
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The table illustrates the types of advertising that
spent
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in
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 four car companies, including
Renault
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,
Rover
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,
Vauxhall
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 and Cetirzine in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom in the year 2002.
This
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provide
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 the expenditure
in
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on
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 types of advertising on press, cinema, outdoor, radio and TV.
It is clear that
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Renault
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 company spent the highest amount of money
in
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on
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 advertising. Press advertisement seems the most preferable among
other advertisement
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another advertisement
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, whilst cinema was
prefered
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preferred
 least. In terms of press, the
most
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highest spent was
Renault
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 (45
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millions
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), followed by
Rover
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 (38
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millions
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million
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), Certirzine (12
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millions
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million
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) and
Vauxhall
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 (8
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millions
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million
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).
However
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,
in
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on
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 TV
advertise
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advertising
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, Certirzine spent the greatest which is 70
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millions
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million
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 and the lowest was
Rover
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 which is 45
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millions
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million
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.
Moreover
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,
Renault
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 and
Vauxhall
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 spent on cinema 6
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millions
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million
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 and 5
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millions
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million
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, respectively,
while
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 the remaining companies
was
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 not used.
Nevertheless
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,
all
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 of company spent 15
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millions
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million
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 which is the same amount
in
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on
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 Radio
advertisement
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advertising
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.
In addition
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, 7
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millions
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million
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 was used
in
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outdoor
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 in
Renault
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 and
Vauxhall
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,
while
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 Certirzine and
Rover
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 used 3
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millions
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million
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 and 2
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millions
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million
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, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words renault, rover, vauxhall, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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