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Not everything that is learned is contained in books. Do you agree or disagree?

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Reading a
book
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 is
essential
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an essential
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 part for people in order to broaden
horizons
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their horizons
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,
rise
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raise
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their theorical
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theorical
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theoretical
 background, and
also
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 improve creativity. At
this
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 point there is a question comes to
the
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minds
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mind
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; whether everything
that is
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 learned is provided in
books
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 or not.
While
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books
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 give
numerous
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a lot of
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information
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, I
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disagree with the notion that we can access everything via
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book
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books
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. It can be easily seen that really jobs experienced is more important than learning
information
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 by reading,
on the other hand
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, travelling may ensure deeper
information
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 to individuals.
Fistly
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First
, in terms of business. It can be easily stated that most
of
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companies looking for
empolyees
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employees
 who have at least five years
experience
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of experience
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. Even
candidates
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though candidates
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 have a good degree from their college, companies prefer to
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one
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. It is happening because education gives
huge
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 amount of theoretical knowledge
to
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them
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which is essential to achieve a
succesfull
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successful
 career, but grasping unwritten business laws like communication methods, takes time.
Moreover
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, take some jobs which
requires
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 eye-hand coordination,
for
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 dentistry or medicine.
While
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one
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-year doctors know special technics for surgery, older
collegues
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colleagues
 are able to be more successful since they managed more surgery than young ones.
To sum up
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,
one
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 should always remember that in work life having
experince
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experience
 is more crucial than learning through a
book
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.
Secondly
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, reading
books
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 or articles may be very practical and affordable
to learn
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for learning
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 another language or culture, yet it gives superficial
information
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 to learners. Imagine
that
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two students whose aim is learning English,
while
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first
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the first
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one
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 moving to Manchester, the other trying to learn
grammer
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grammar
 rules and vocabulary
list
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lists
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 at home.
At the end
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 of
one
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 month the difference between these
to
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 would be remarkable. Since,
while
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 the latter
one
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learnes
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learners
learns
learned
 linguistic rules, without
enought
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enough
practise
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practice
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, it is almost impossible to grasp
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 of these rules.
As a result
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, learning
new
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 language requires
face to face
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face-to-face
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communications
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communication
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 with native ones.
To conclude
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, when all things are taken into account,
while
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 reading a
book
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 brings numerous
benefit
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benefits
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 like theoretical knowledge or linguistic
rule
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rules
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, without practise it is not possible to grasp
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. It may be more effective to combine data
which
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learned from
books
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 and
real life
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real-life
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experince
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experience
experiences
 to achieve
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the personal
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 purpose.

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