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In today’s job market it is far more important to have practical skills than theoretical knowledge. In the future, job applicants may not need any formal qualifications. To what extend do you agree or disagree

A job is what our lives are all about, so finding a suitable occupation that makes us up to maximum happy is a must for everyone.
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 some argue practical skills go a long way in the world of business, others believe theoretical knowledge is too important to be ignored. In my view,
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 highly trained employees play a crucial role in the success of the company, theory is an inseparable part of each skill. On the one hand, underestimating the importance of vocational ability is not logical. To clarify, having a lot of information without practical experience is a reckless mission, since these employees can not use their information to perform their tasks in the work environment, and they need long hours of education to become experts in their occupation.
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, many companies prefer to hire trained workers, which not only decreases the amount of energy and money that must be spent on training them but
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 makes a valuable contribution to improving productivity and efficiency in the workplace.
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, theoretical lessons are a serious business in the world of education. These kinds of subjects allow people to understand how they can work with technological devices in their working environment.
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, an engineer cannot design a professional car without learning about physical and mathematical regulations, even if they are full of experience with these devices.
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, they boost analytical skills among employees, as they try a wide variety of ways to accomplish a mission. In
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 way, they can come up with a lot of the best solutions for each problem. In conclusion,
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 no one dares to deny the importance of vocational skills, I believe they cannot replace scientific subjects, as theory is rooted in every part of our lives.

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task-response
Task response: State a clear position in the introduction and restate it in the conclusion. The prompt asks if practical skills are more valuable now and in the future. Tie your view to this question.
coherence
Coherence and cohesion: Paragraphs are clear, but some sentences are long and ideas jump. Use simple, short sentences and topic sentences to guide the reader.
grammar
Grammar and word choice: There are errors and unusual phrases (e.g., 'maximum happy', 'cannot' written as 'can not'). Use standard grammar and common words to improve accuracy.
organization
Structured essay with clear paragraphs and linking phrases
content
Examples from real work life show how theory and practice meet in work tasks
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Some good ideas on how both sides help a company
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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