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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed in the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed in the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
#shops #country
The given line graphs illustrate
about
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the
amount
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number
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 of new
shops
 and
shops
 that have been closed in a country
during
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from
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 2011 until 2018.
Overall
, the number of
shops
, either
it is
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closed or opened
are
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mostly
fluctuating
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fluctuated
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 throughout the
period
 given.
In addition
, more
shops
 are opened during the starting
period
, which is 2011, whilst
at the end
 of
period
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the period
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 shown that shop closures became the majority. In regard to
year
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of
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2011, almost 9000
of
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shops
 are opening before it falls dramatically to 4000 in the exact next year.
On the other hand
, the change amount of
shops closure
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shop closures
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are
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is
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 less dramatic
which
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started
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starting
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 at more than 6000 and slightly
drop
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dropping
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 to 6000
n
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in
 2012. New
shops
 began to rebound again for almost two years until 2014 by around 6000
shops
 and
suprassed
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surpassed
suppressed
 the closed
shops
 even though it faced a
slightly
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 drop to 4000, which is the same exact amount as in 2012. The same goes
with
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for
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the
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shop
closure
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closures
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, it began to rapidly decrease and drop
tho
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to
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 the lowest point for almost none of
shops
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the shops
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are
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closing in 2015. After 2015, the number of closing
shops
surge
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 sharply and reached above 5000
shops
 and
remain
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remained
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 constant until the end of
period
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the period
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 given. Meanwhile, opening
shops
remain
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remained
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 stable only until 2017
for
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at
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 4000 and started to decline
at
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to
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 3000 in 2018.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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