The graph below shows the number of shops that closed in the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
The given line graphs illustrate
about
the Change preposition
apply
amount
of new Change the quantifier
number
shops
and shops
that have been closed in a country during
2011 until 2018. Change preposition
from
Overall
, the number of shops
, either it is
closed or opened Verb problem
apply
are
mostly Verb problem
apply
fluctuating
throughout the Wrong verb form
fluctuated
period
given. In addition
, more shops
are opened during the starting period
, which is 2011, whilst at the end
of period
shown that shop closures became the majority.
In regard to Add an article
the period
year
Change the article
the year
of
2011, almost 9000 Change preposition
apply
of
Change preposition
apply
shops
are opening before it falls dramatically to 4000 in the exact next year. On the other hand
, the change amount of shops closure
Fix the agreement mistake
shop closures
are
less dramatic Change the verb form
is
which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
started
at more than 6000 and slightly Wrong verb form
starting
drop
to 6000 Wrong verb form
dropping
n
2012. New Correct your spelling
in
shops
began to rebound again for almost two years until 2014 by around 6000 shops
and suprassed
the closed Correct your spelling
surpassed
suppressed
shops
even though it faced a slightly
drop to 4000, which is the same exact amount as in 2012. The same goes Change the adverb
slight
with
Change preposition
for
the
shop Correct article usage
apply
closure
, it began to rapidly decrease and drop Fix the agreement mistake
closures
tho
the lowest point for almost none of Correct your spelling
to
shops
Add an article
the shops
are
closing in 2015.
After 2015, the number of closing Unnecessary verb
apply
shops
surge
sharply and reached above 5000 Wrong verb form
surged
shops
and remain
constant until the end of Wrong verb form
remained
period
given. Meanwhile, opening Correct article usage
the period
shops
remain
stable only until 2017 Wrong verb form
remained
for
4000 and started to decline Change preposition
at
at
3000 in 2018.Change preposition
to
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