The graph shows the proportion of population aged 65 and over in major developed countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of people aged 65 years and over living in seven developed
countries
from 1950 and the prediction in
the future until 2050. Change preposition
for
Overall
, Japan, Germany
, and Rusia
have Correct your spelling
Russia
significant
increase Correct article usage
a significant
at the end
of the period, while
the rest of the countries
listed generally have a slight increase.
In 1950, the population aged 65 and over in Germany
, Japan, and Korea
was less than 10%. The number generally increased in these countries
, but Korea
underwent a slight fell
in 1970, Replace the word
fall
while
it fell in Germany
in 1990. Japan underwent a dramatic increased
surpassing Replace the word
increase
Germany
in 2000, and this
upward trend is predicted to happen until 2050 with the proportion
almost reach
40%. Wrong verb form
reaching
In addition
, Korea
underwent a significant increased
from 1990 surpassing several Replace the word
increase
countries
and predicted
to stand Add a missing verb
is predicted
on
Change preposition
in
the
second place in 2050 with 35% population, followed by Correct article usage
apply
Germany
with the
Correct article usage
a
proportion
slightly less than that of Korea
.
On the other hand
, the proportion
in Correct article usage
the U.S
U.S
, France, Australia, and China was less than 15% in 1950. The trend in France was increasing and Correct your spelling
U.S.
predicted
to end Add a missing verb
is predicted
with
around 25% in 2050. Meanwhile, the Change preposition
at
proportion
in U.S
, Australia, and China was generally increased with a slight Correct your spelling
U.S.
fell
in some Replace the word
fall
year
and predicted to reach less than 28% in 2050.Fix the agreement mistake
years
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, germany, korea, proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 4 times.
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