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The table shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the 2018 Winter Olympic Games. Write at least 150 words. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The table shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the 2018 Winter Olympic Games. Write at least 150 words. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
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The table provides information on how many
medals
 from three categories
was
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were
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 achieved by
10
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the 10
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 best countries during
Winter
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the Winter
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 Olympic Games in 2018.
Overall
, the
number
 of
medals
 won in each category is different in each country. Norway and Germany as the leading country in the games achieved the same
number
 of
gold
medal
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medals
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 (14),
while
 the
number
 of
silver
 and
bronze
 achieved by Germany was 4
medals
 lower than Norway.
Following
this
, Canada,
United
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the United
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 States, and
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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,
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 got 9, 8, and 7
gold
medals
 respectively. Meanwhile,
silver
medals
 won by Canada and
United
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the United
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 States
was
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were
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 two numbers ahead of
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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Netherlands
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, and
bronze
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the bronze
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 won by the United States and
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 was around
a
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apply
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half of that of Canada. For the
last
 5 countries, Sweden won the most
gold
 and
silver
 (7 and 6 respectively), but the least in
bronze
 (1).
Following
this
, South Korea, Switzerland, France, and Austria received the same
number
 of
gold
 (5), but the
number
 of
silver
medal
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medals
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was ranging
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ranged
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 from 3-8.
On the other hand
, South Korea and Switzerland achieved 4
bronze
medals
, which was two
number
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numbers
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 lower than what France and Austria got.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "following this".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words medals, number, gold, silver, bronze with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Winter Olympic Games
  • medal count
  • medal tally
  • gold, silver, bronze medals
  • ranking
  • dominant countries
  • athletic performance
  • medal standings
  • podium finishes
  • olympic achievements
  • top contenders
  • competitive edge
  • historical record
  • national pride
  • sportsmanship
  • medal distribution
  • overall trend
  • athletic prowess
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