The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant

The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant
The diagram shows the cycle
life
of the salmon
fish
.
This
process of
life
pass
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the several
eggs
lay
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that lay
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in pure water into the spawning adult
fish
,which remain these
aquanic
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aquatic
species again.
Overall
, the
fish
life
has over 8 years for living and spawning
eggs
before they have gone.
In addition
, each period of the
fish
change
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changes
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significantly
for
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form, lifespans ,how they die and continue their
life
in just under 11 years. As can be seen in the cycle diagram, the beginning of
fish
happen
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in the
eggs
that hanch in about 3 months before
the
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they
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perform into alevin and
feeds
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feed
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yolk-sac for a few weeks. After that time, they will transluate into
fry
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a fry
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group that
survive
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survives
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for 5 to 10 weeks with swimming and feeding. For several months, the
fish
develops “tinger” markings
that
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apply
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in the Parr performance.
The
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age of 1-3
year
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years
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old, the
fish
is accessible to
group
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the group
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and head out to sea.
Next,
they will have the most perfect form of the cycle
life
in the adult body,
in
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this
time, they easily
to
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apply
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be
the
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apply
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good food for the bigger
hunter
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hunters
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as sharks or
the
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apply
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human’s
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fishing in the most
is
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8 years and the least is only 1 year.
Finally
, the final moment of
fish
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the fish
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will
laying
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lay
be laying
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eggs
rebirth the new
eggs
before they die within 2 weeks.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words life, fish, eggs with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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