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The graph below gives invormation about percentage of pupulation in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives invormation about percentage of pupulation in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the
proportion
 of the inhabitants in four Asian countries
stayed
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who stayed
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 in metropolitan
areas
 from 1970 to 2020, with additional
forecast
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forecasts
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 for 2023 and 2040. In general, the percentage of population in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia stayed in metropolitan
areas
 experienced an upward trend from 1970 to 2020.
Similarly
, the number of the inhabitants in city
are
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is
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also
 expected to increase. In detail, the
proportion
 of
Indonesian
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Indonesians
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stayed
Verb problem
living
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 in metropolitan
areas
had
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has
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 increased significantly in the past 50 years from about 15% in 1970 to around 50% in 2020 and it is expected to increase
around
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to around
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 60% in 2030 and 2040.
Similarly
,
Malaysian
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Malaysia
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 had
also
 risen dramatically, stood at 30% in 1970 and
reach
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reached
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 just over 70% in 2020. It
also
 can be seen that the
proportion
 of
Malaysian
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Malaysians
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stayed
Verb problem
living
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 in big towns
are
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is
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 predicted to increase
around
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by around
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 80% in the same years.
Furthermore
, in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, the
proportion
 of
citizen
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citizens
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stayed
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staying
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 in metropolitan
areas
 had fluctuated from just over 30% in 1970 to over 40% in 2020 and it is expected to reach 50% in 2030 and over 50% in 2040.
On the other hand
,
Thailand
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Thailand's
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 citizen
had
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apply
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gradually increased from just under 20% in 1970 to around 30% in 2020 and it
also
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is also
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 expected to reach 40% in 2030 and over 40% in 2040.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, similarly".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, areas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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