The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates how many
shops
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were closed and opened in a single country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, there had been a significant
decrease
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in the
number
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of
shops
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opening
on
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in
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the given period,
while
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the
number
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of
shops
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closing
was slightly
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was slightly decreased
was slightly decreasing
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decrease
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. The
number
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of
shops
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closing from 2011 to 2014
ranging
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ranged
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around 6,000 and 7,000. In 2015, the figure underwent a significant
decrease
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and reached its lowest point at less than 1,000 before it bounced back and rose significantly in 2016 to 5,000 closures.
This
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number
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remained stable until 2018.
On the other hand
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, in 2011, the
number
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of stores opening stood at approximately 8,500 before it underwent a dramatic
decrease
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in 2012 to 4,000.
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However
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However,
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the figure rose
up
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apply
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to 6,000 openings in 2014 before
fell down
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falling
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in 2015 and
reached
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reaching
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the same
number
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as in 2012. The
number
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then
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remained stable until 2017 before fell down to its lowest point at 3,000 in 2018.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, decrease, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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