The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of average spending on eight categories in one week by families in a single country in 1968 and 2018.
Overall
, people spent the most on
food
in 1968, but the trend changed in 2018 with leisure as the highest spending in families. In 1968, the spending
for
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on
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food
was around three times higher than other categories at 30%. Housing
and
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apply
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clothing and
footware
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footwear
was
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were
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one third
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one-third
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of spending
of
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on
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food
.
In addition
, household
goods
, personal
goods
, transport, leisure, and fuel and power proportion
was ranging
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ranged
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approximately from 6% to 9%.
On the other hand
, in 2018, families spent most of their income
for
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on
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leisure activities by around 25%.
Following
this
, spending
for
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on
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housing and
food
was around 19% and 18% respectively,
while
the proportion for transport was lower than 15%.
In addition
, spending
for
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on
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household
goods
was the same as it was in 1968. Meanwhile, spending
for
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on
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clothing and
footware
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footwear
, fuel and power, and personal
goods
was around 5% and lower.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Vocabulary: Replace the words food, goods with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure patterns
  • proportion
  • weekly income
  • accounted for
  • total expenditure
  • housing and utility expenses
  • transportation costs
  • other expenses
  • education
  • healthcare
  • leisure activities
  • spending patterns
  • witnessed a considerable rise
  • experienced a substantial increase
  • allocating a larger proportion
  • reducing their expenditure
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