The graph shows the average monthly change in th prices of three metals during 2014.

The graph shows the average monthly change in th prices of three metals during 2014.
The line chart illustrates the
percent
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difference
in monthly prices of three types of metals throughout 2014.
Overall
, the
percent
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difference
in monthly price had experienced a marked decrease in two types of metals and others had slightly increased. In detail, nickel, which is the highest percentage
difference
at the beginning of the
year
, had decreased dramatically from 6% to the lowest point of -3% in June, before
finally
risen
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gradually to 1%
at the end
of the
year
.
On the other hand
, there was a gradual fall in Copper’s price from 2% in January, remained constant at 1% in July to September, and
then
slightly increased to around 1.8% in December.
However
,
while
the other two types of metal had decreased in importance, the opposite was true in the case of Zinc. The
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difference
in monthly price stood at 1% at the beginning of the
year
, before
increased
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to 2%
at the end
of the
year
. Zinc had reached a high of 3% in the second month, before
decreased
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gradually to -1% in the middle
year
and slightly increased to the end of the
year
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words difference, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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