The charts illustrate the information about the amount of usage of 3 different nutrients in daily meals consumed in USA.

The charts illustrate the information about the amount of usage of 3 different nutrients in daily meals consumed in USA.
The charts show the comparisons of
nutrients
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nutrient
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intake, in
this
case
is
Unnecessary verb
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sodium
, saturated fat, and added sugar, by the citizen of the USA in their daily meals.
Overall
, among those three nutrients,
sodium
and saturated fat are mostly consumed through their menu for dinner
while
sugar
was
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is
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the only one contained mostly in snacks. The first nutrient,
sodium
, is mostly found in the menu of 43% of American
dinner
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dinners
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. It is
also
consumed during lunch but only 29% of it.
While
only 14% of
sodium
is consumed during breakfast and snacks.
Mostly
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also
taken during dinner was saturated fats reaching 37%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium with synonyms.
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