The charts illustrate the information about the amount of usage of 3 different nutrients in daily meals consumed in USA.

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The charts show the comparisons of

nutrients

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nutrient

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intake, in

this

case

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apply

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sodium

, saturated fat, and added sugar, by the citizen of the USA in their daily meals.

Overall

, among those three nutrients,

sodium

and saturated fat are mostly consumed through their menu for dinner

while

sugar

was

Wrong verb form

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the only one contained mostly in snacks. The first nutrient,

sodium

, is mostly found in the menu of 43% of American

dinner

Fix the agreement mistake

dinners

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. It is

also

consumed during lunch but only 29% of it.

While

only 14% of

sodium

is consumed during breakfast and snacks.

Mostly

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Most

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also

taken during dinner was saturated fats reaching 37%.

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The charts illustrate the information about the amount of usage of 3 different nutrients in daily meals consumed in USA.

The world of work is changing rapidly. Working conditions today are not the same as before and people no longer rely on taking one job for life. Describe the possible causes and give suggestion on how people should prepare for work in the future.

Scientists believe that in order to protect the environment, people must use less energy in their daily lives. However, most people have not changed the way they live. Why do you think many people have not taken individual action? What could be done to encourage them to take action?

Investment in local amenities such as leisure centres is the best way for the government to foster a good community spirit. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.