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Doctors in many countries say that people do not do enough physical exercises. What are the causes of this trend? How can the situation be improved?

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people are not doing any physical
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exercise
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discuss
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people
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exercise and what factors can motivate them to exercise
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 a regular basis. First of all, communities
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they
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their
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places
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exercise
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even though
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demotivated
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exersise
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exercise
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time
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 he is continuing his
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studies
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 pressure and
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assignments
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exersise
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exercise
. in my opinion, if everyone is
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 about the
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benefits
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gym
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 and if they
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 motivated surely they will do
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exersise
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exercise
regularlly
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regularly
. So, at that
time
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 government should make some advertisements or make some videos about the
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benefits
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gym
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. If people know doing
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exersise
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exercise
exercises
everyday
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 can remove the chances of heart
diseases
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 lead a peaceful life they might manage some
time
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 from their busy schedule.
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, in every office if they
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compulsory
 doing 15minuites
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exersise
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exercise
 every morning before starting their
work
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 it might helpful for everyone. in conclusion, people were becoming lazy day by day. Because of
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 by various diseases
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then
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 past. If they were motivated and
get
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 acknowledgement about
thier
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their
 health they might
do
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gym
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the gym
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 regularly.

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coherence cohesion
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • physical inactivity
  • busy and stressful
  • work schedules
  • lack of motivation
  • technological advancements
  • unhealthy habits
  • insufficient awareness
  • benefits of exercise
  • sedentary behavior
  • health risks
  • sedentary jobs
  • physical fitness
  • physical well-being
  • regular exercise
  • physical activity
  • health professionals
  • public awareness campaigns
  • exercise routines
  • fitness facilities
  • personal trainers
  • health benefits
  • weight management
  • stress reduction
  • improved cardiovascular health
  • increased energy levels
  • enhanced mood
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