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The charts below show the production of different types of citrus fruit in Brazil, China, and the USA.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the production of different types of citrus fruit in Brazil, China, and the USA.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts display the production of several citrus
fruits
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 in three countries
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Brazil
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, China, and the
USA
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.
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,
oranges
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 are the
the
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most produced in
Brazil
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 and
USA
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,
while
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 the agriculture of
tangerines
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 makes up the most significant share in China. Other citrus
fruits
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 that are not specifically mentioned are the least produced in all three countries. As previously said, the biggest percentage in the cultivation of citrus fruit in
Brazil
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 is made up
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oranges
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 at 87%, leaving behind lemons and
tangerines
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, both at around 5% and a minimal share of grapefruit and other citrus fruit
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, the production of
oranges
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 the most significant in the
USA
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followed by grapefruit at 16% and lemons with half the percentage of the latter. The rest
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os
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 made up
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Tangerines
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 and other citrus
fruits
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tangerines
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 comprised just approximately 5
percent
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 of the production of citrus
fruits
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 in the
USA
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 and
Brazil
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, it's the most cultivated type in China (74%), and unlike in the
USA
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 and
Brazil
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,
oranges
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 are the
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18%
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 share, double the proportion that the other three categories comprise together.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words fruits, brazil, usa, oranges, tangerines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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