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Band 2.5

Nowadays, many people prefer eating out rather than cooking at home. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #home #outweigh
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I want to travel
in
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Africa
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. Unfortunately, I have never been
in
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Africa
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, because my family prefer more traditional travelling. But I think it’s
good
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 idea. There are a
lot
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 of interesting and very beautiful places in
Africa
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, I think.
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, there are a
lot
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 of safari parks and reserves with unique animals in Tanzania. And
only
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 in
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Africa
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Africa,
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 you can see so
big
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large
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 amount of different amazing natural sights.
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, travelling to
Africa
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 is interesting for me because I’m interested in
native
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the native
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 citizens of
Africa
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. In my opinion, it will be
good
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 experience to talk with them. Of course,
such
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 travelling may be expensive because of
long
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 distance from Moscow to
Africa
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, but service in
Africa
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 is not very good and expensive and so it compensates
the
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 expensive flight. Another big problem of travelling in
Africa
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 is safety. Before travelling you have to do a
lot
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 of
vacines
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vaccines
 to protect your health from different
african
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 ills.
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 it is not all problems, there are a
lot
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 of dangerous animals in
Africa
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 and you must think about protecting yourself from them.
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, a
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 of countries in
Africa
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 have a high level of crime.
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, before travelling to
Aftica
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Africa
 you should think about your safety, but I think it will be
really
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 good experience and I want to go to
Africa
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 someday.
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coherence cohesion
Provide a clear introduction that addresses the prompt and a conclusion that sums up the main points of the essay.
task achievement
Ensure that the essay fully addresses the given topic and provides relevant examples and arguments.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary and demonstrate a more nuanced understanding of the topic.
grammatical range
Work on sentence structure, grammar accuracy, and use of different sentence types to improve overall coherence and clarity.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • social experience
  • cultural experience
  • variety
  • food choices
  • relief
  • cooking responsibilities
  • cost
  • health concerns
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