The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and year after it was refurbished. The charts shows the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same period.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and year after it was refurbished. The charts shows the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same period.
The lower table depicts the
amount
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of
visitors
to Ashdown Museum during the period before and after it was
refubrished
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refurbished
, with the pie charts indicating whether they enjoyed their visit during the same period. In general, we can see from the data that after
refubrishment
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refurbishment
the
amount
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of tourists rose significantly,
furthermore
the proportion of tourists that were 'satisfied' and 'very satisfied'
inreased
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increased
dramatically. It can be clearly seen that after
year
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when
Museum
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the Museum
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was
refubrished
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refurbished
the percentage of dissatisfied
visitors
derceased
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decreased
deceased
more than two times,
whereas
the percentage of 'satisfied' tourists rose slightly
for
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ten per
cent
. The figures were fifteen per
cent
and
fourty
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forty
four
per
cent
respectively. Meanwhile, for 'very satisfied' guests the pattern appears slightly different. In
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before
refubrishment
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refurbishment
the rate accounts for
small
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a small
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15 per
cent
, but after
refrefubrishment
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re refurbishment
the figure increased to 35 per
cent
.
Additionally
, after
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the proportion of 'very dissatisfied'
visitors
declined two times from 10 per
cent
to five per
cent
.
According to
the table, during the year after
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re refurbishment
refrefubrishment
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the total number of
visitors
moved upward significantly from 74 000 to 92 000.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor satisfaction
  • facilities
  • accessibility
  • interactive elements
  • visitor feedback
  • aesthetic improvements
  • functionality improvements
  • marketing and advertising
  • special events
  • educational programs
  • engaging environment
  • comfortable environment
  • diverse experiences
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