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Advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad . What is your opinion.

Studying abroad is a great possibility for
new generation
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 youth all around the world, but not everyone will find it to be the greatest option. In
this
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 I’ll
tell
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 about the benefits and drawbacks of studying overseas.
To begin
 with, the most evident reality is that individuals who have studied at elite institutions overseas are in higher demand in prosperous industries and factories than
people
 of average intelligence
people
 who attended local universities.
Secondly
, studying abroad gives a great opportunity to build up new language skills. Coming to
development
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 of mental skills, moving to another country makes
people
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step out of their comfort zone and broaden their horizons.
However
, sending students overseas has several cons. The long distance from their motherland can make
people
 homesick. The feeling of loneliness caused by the absence of familiar
people
 can be irritating and depressing. The second/
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 reason is that studying abroad for foreigners in other countries
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 quite expensive, so students must be aware of their financial capabilities before applying to international colleges.
To sum up
, studying abroad widens students’ perspectives and opens new doors, but it is
also
 very stressful.
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task response
Ensure that the essay directly addresses all parts of the task question and provides a clear position. Provide a balanced discussion of advantages and disadvantages with an opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Organize ideas logically and coherently, using cohesive devices to link ideas within and between paragraphs. Use paragraphing effectively to structure the response.
lexical resource
Work on improving the range and accuracy of vocabulary used. Use more precise and varied vocabulary, idiomatic expressions, and synonyms to enhance the lexical resource.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure, punctuation, and use of grammar. Develop more complex structures, demonstrate control of a range of structures and use them with flexibility and accuracy.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bilingual
  • multilingual
  • fluency
  • communicate
  • cognitive skills
  • cultural awareness
  • opportunities
  • globalized world
  • job market
  • interact
  • linguistic abilities
  • cultural exchange
  • language proficiency
  • language barrier
  • foreign travel
  • personal growth
  • academic achievement
  • self-confidence
  • enhance
  • cross-cultural communication
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