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The map illustrates the between and predicted future Islip town centre.

The map illustrates the between and predicted future Islip town centre.
The provided maps compare the Islip
town
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 centre in the future and present,
as well as
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, the proposed changes that will take place in the
location
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. A number of modifications will be implemented and will be discussed in the lines below.
Overall
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, after looking at the changes and modifications, it can be seen that these improvements will be for the well-being of the locals of
this
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town
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 because they will enhance the safety of pedestrians. In the beginning, a new pedestrian lane will be constructed in the north of the shops;
therefore
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, the safety of pedestrians will be increased.
Furthermore
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, there will be a dual carriageway that will be expanded along the
town
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 centre's perimeter.
In addition
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 to that the shops will be relocated to the middle of the
town
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 and its old
location
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 will be converted into a car park and bus station.
Additionally
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, new residential areas in the northeast and southwest will be built. It is
also
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 worth noticing that the
location
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 of the school will not undergo any change.
Finally
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, moving to the park,
according to
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 the provided maps, the size of the park will be reduced,
however
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, it will remain at the same
location
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town, location with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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