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You have decided to leave your current employment. Write a letter to your employer. Include the following in your letter: – Explain why you are writing – Explain why you have decided to leave the company – Tell your employer what you plan to do after leaving your present employment

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Dear Mr. Curren, I hope
this
 email finds you in good health and doing well. I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that I am going to leave your
company
 effective from 1 January
,
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 2024 with a one-month notice period. I joined your esteemed organization in 2019, and I have been enjoying my assigned tasks since
then
. Recently, I got a better opportunity from a multinational
company
that is
 England-based. After thinking
in
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 several aspects, I decided to leave your organization with a view to enhancing my professional career.
Moreover
, I will take
few
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 days time after leaving your
company
 before joining in new
company
. I need to prepare myself with bags and baggage as I will shift from Bangladesh to my new job location in England.
Also
, I will
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 some quality time with my friends and family before leaving the country. Considering the above-mentioned information, I am seeking your kind cooperation for my smooth separation from your
company
. Yours faithfully, Faisal
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coherence cohesion
Reconsider the formality of the greeting and closing in the letter to match the context of the letter.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea for better coherence and organization.
lexical resource
Use more formal and appropriate vocabulary throughout the letter to enhance the lexical resource.
grammatical range
Pay closer attention to grammar and sentence structures to improve accuracy and fluency in writing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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