Some people believe that children that commit crimes should be punished. Others think the parents should be punished instead. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In the contemporary world, many youngsters have been influenced by violent films or movies for a few decades.

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tendency will have a negative impact on society.

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, the public

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that they are responsible and would punish the youngsters.

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people believe that it is

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to manage rather than punishment.

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essay will outline my views, provide relevant examples and conclude the essay.  To commence, I propose there is a major reason for

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a role when they experience crime as reflecting.

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, some psychologists claimed that more and more youths took part in various

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things when they watched

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violent movies in order to promote their images and draw attention to adults.

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, numerous

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would prefer to take the wrong action in society,

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as stealing privacy.

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,

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should take their faults and have to improve their wrongdoings.  Even though the public

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the responsibility is young, some adults suppose that

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should be in charge. I suggest there is

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reason why

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should play the right role in their young

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, in Hong Kong, there are a few youngsters who have experienced stealing others' possessions for many years. Some social workers stated that they would like to take negative action in

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their desire.

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,

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trend leads to disadvantages in society and reports that some parenting guidance is insufficient.

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reason,

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should take

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responsibility

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of punishing them

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could cause a lower- esteem

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them.  In conclusion, based on the statements above, I believe that the public penalties

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and

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should play the right role in guiding and educating them

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how to avoid some wrongdoings as well, rather than using

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. It is because

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hope adults listen and understand them

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so they

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can improve in the future.