The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of residents’ coffee and tea purchasing and consuming habits in last 4 weeks in five different cities (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart) in Australia.

The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of residents’ coffee and tea purchasing and consuming habits in last 4 weeks in five different cities (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart) in Australia.
The bar chart depicts the survey output about
coffee
and tea consumption habits (buying and drinking) in five
Austarlian
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Australian
cities over the
last
4 weeks period.
Overall
, the residents
prefered
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preferred
to consume
coffee
and tea served at
café
s
while
the fresh
coffee
was the least.
In addition
, Sydney residents bought the most fresh
coffee
while
that
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those
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of
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in
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Hobart consumed the most
in
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apply
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instant
coffee
.
However
, people who lived in Melbourne visited café more often compared to 4
others
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other
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cities. In Sydney, the
number
of people
consumed
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who consumed
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fresh
coffee
was around 44%
while
the
number
who bought
instant
products was just over 45%.
Conversely
, the
number
who visited café nearly
double
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doubled
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which accounted for 60%.
Likewise
,
Melboure
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Melbourne
had
similar
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a similar
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pattern, making up
to
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apply
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approximately 47%
instant
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of instant
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coffee
) and nearly a half for
and
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apply
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fresh
coffee
, respectively
while
went
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going
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to café was about 64%. Regarding Brisbane and Adelaide, Both cities purchased fresh
coffee
just over
one third
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one-third
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.
Nevertheless
, the
number
of
instant
coffee
consumed by the residents and the proportion of visiting café in Brisbane was higher, reaching about 53% and 56% respectively
while
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in adelaide
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adelaide
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Adelaide
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just under 50%.
Furthermore
, Hobart showed a huge discrepancy which
has
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was
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around 37% for fresh
coffee
consumption
while
visiting café was higher, nearly twofolds.
This
area
also
the
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has the
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highest
instant
coffee
consumption, reaching approximately 54%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, instant, café, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • residents
  • habits
  • purchasing
  • consuming
  • illustrates
  • comparison
  • preferences
  • trend
  • frequency
  • café culture
  • observations
  • urban lifestyle
  • fresh coffee
  • instant coffee
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