Today many people spend less and less time in their homes. What are the reasons and what are the effects of this trend on individuals and society?
In contemporary society,
people
seem to spend their time at home not as much as their former generations did. In this
essay, I will scrutinize the causes and impacts on their personal side and
.
Correct word choice
apply
Initially
, people
can not be satisfied with facilities
in their houses if they want to enjoy some entertainment activities. Correct article usage
the facilities
For example
, in my country
Vietnamese Add a comma
country,
people
tend to go to cafes or pubs where they have diverse choices of beverage products with their friends to have idle chit-chat about their hobbies or work
. Besides
, it seems evident that less time at home mainly stems from hectic schemes. Each individual in modern life has to work
with high density, they work
at least eight hours per day and sometimes work
overtime to complete the tasks. Consequently
, the time budget in their accommodation areas gradually becomes less.
As a consequence
of this
issue, the
family bonds may be lost if members do not interact regularly. Correct article usage
apply
Moreover
, people
may also
forget their roles in their family or among relatives and they may not be given timely support when needed. In terms of social effects, the risks come from lack
of attention to family members with each other, especially with children. To be more specific, the irregular appearance of adult Correct article usage
a lack
people
means that they interact less with their offsprings
. Fix the agreement mistake
offspring
This
can lead children to become stubborn and uncontrollable in behavior
. Change the spelling
behaviour
Consequently
, they may not be a heroic citizen in the future and may become a social burden with potential risks of criminal
and violence.
In conclusion, it is an important issue which can not be ignored, especially because it enables them to get together at home. Replace the word
crime
Change preposition
In totally
totally
, lack of that has a detrimental effect after a long eraChange the word
total
..
Replace the punctuation
.
...
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