You recently bought a jacket online, but when it arrived it was wrong in size and color. Write a letter to the online store. In your letter: 1. Describe the jacket you ordered 2. Explain what was wrong with the item you received 3. Say what you would like the company to do

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inform you about an issue with my recent
order
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. Two weeks ago, I ordered a pink jacket with painted flowers and some other clothes from your online shop.
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, when I received my
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today, it did not match what I ordered. All the items were incorrect. I ordered a pink jacket, but I received a blue one
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.
Additionally
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, the other clothes I received were
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wrong. I am quite frustrated because I waited a long time for my
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, only to receive the wrong items. I hope your company can consider my problem and address it quickly. I
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suggest that you improve your
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process in the future, as I noticed many negative comments on your website from other customers who received the wrong orders.
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situation does not reflect well on your business. Thank you for your attention to
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matter. Sincerely, Lulu Ahmed

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coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your points in a clearer way. Maybe separate the description of the jacket and the problems into different paragraphs.
task achievement
You can add more details about the jacket you ordered, like the size.
suitable writing tone
You used a polite tone, which is great for this type of letter.
complete response
You clearly mentioned the problem and suggested an improvement for the company.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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