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Everyone should be encouraged to use fewer resources rather than recycle more. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Resources are consumed at an accelerated speed in modern society as with the rapid rise of the global population and industries. Some people believe that it is more significant to spend less on
materials
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 than recycle them. I generally agree with
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 for the following reasons.
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 with, there is enough evidence to support the idea that it is a must for everyone to consume less raw
materials
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 as
this
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 will maintain biodiversity and increase the chances of our future
generation
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 survival. Saving energy, especially electricity, could help us to utilise
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 appropriately for other areas where it should be used wisely.
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, in developing countries,
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 as Pakistan, many villages are living in darkness because of the lack of electricity. Even though they are willing to pay for service, unfortunately, the demand cannot be fulfilled because of the overconsumption of lights in urban areas.
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, people have to live without heat and light
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 the improper management of energy resources.
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,
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positive
 consequences will be expected through recycling as it produces less
wastes
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 as more citizens buy second-hand items.
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, Finland is popular for its vehement commitment to protecting the environment. In fact, 60% of the products sold in the country use recycled
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.
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, there are trash boxes designed to collect garbage in different categories
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 as cans, bottles and plastics in unanimous spots. It has made spectacular outcomes in saving natural
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, many nations still underestimate the significance of recycling as they distribute free plastic bags and paper in stores, prioritizing their convenience and economic activities. In conclusion,
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 recycling is one of the common ways to limit natural destruction, its impact is still minimal because of the unwillingness of many countries. It would be more realistic and effective for countries to encourage consumers to use fewer resources.

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