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Scientist predict that all people will choose to talk the same global language in the future. Do you think this is positive or negative development?

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Language is the media of communication. People of different states use different languages. Researchers opine that in future only a specific wording will be sustained. If it occurs,
this
 might be a positive improvement. As there are a thousand languages available, societies are using them to communicate with the same culture because it is easy to express themselves in their own way.
In contrast
, it is difficult to understand the other jargon.
Therefore
, communities from different cultures are facing difficulties in explaining their feelings. Common prose is working as a bridge to work together.
For instance
, English is used as an official speech of most of the states in the world.
As a result
, it is now comfortable to communicate with different regions. It helps to make the world a global village.
On the other hand
, following the terminology change, cultural diversity is
also
 happening.
Thus
, nations are more diverted to other perceptions, especially in the Western one.
Consequently
, they are losing their own identity. The Indian subcontinent,
for example
, blended its cultural activities with the civilizations of Western countries.
Thereafter
, they are forgetting the customs of their previous generation.
Whereas
 now birthday celebration is common in
this
 area, taking care of their parents is uncommon. Unfortunately, the reverse was true in
this
 region.
On the other hand
, folks were concerned about helping each other, now they only think for themselves.
Although
 they followed their religion, now it is rare. In conclusion, it can be said that
while
 using a single expression has some benefits, like accelerating globalisation, the drawbacks,
such
 as eradicating different fashions, are unbearable.
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task response
The essay adequately addresses the prompt and provides a balanced view on the positive and negative aspects of a global language. However, the essay could benefit from a clearer stance and more specific examples to support the argument.
coherence cohesion
The essay demonstrates a logical structure with clear introduction and conclusion. The main points are supported and connected well. To improve coherence and cohesion, aim to use linking words and transitional phrases more effectively to connect ideas throughout the essay.
lexical resource
The essay displays a good range of vocabulary and uses a variety of expressions. To further enhance the lexical resource, consider incorporating more formal and academic language to strengthen the argument.
grammatical range
The essay shows good control of grammar and a range of sentence structures. To improve grammatical range, focus on using complex structures and varied sentence patterns more consistently.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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