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Cities around the world are continuing to expand as people leave the countryside. Some people prefer to live in the city while others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views.

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The modern age has been marked by the development of metropolises.
While
 many townspeople find
city
life
 enjoyable, other individuals choose to reside in small towns or villages.
This
 essay will examine both views, though, personally, I would like to remain
as
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a
city
 resident. People favor metropolitan lives mainly for the
conveniency
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convenience
 and large population. The most prominent advantage of modern cities is that they are usually
equiped
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equipped
 with various infrastructures to offer citizens better living qualities, including the efficient public transit system, sufficient
health care
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 institutions and various sports centres. In
nany
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any
 central business
districts
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,
for instance
, one can spend the entire day without even leaving the complexes, where fashion
salongs
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salons
, coffee bars,
resturants
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restaurants
, clothing stores and
move
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movie
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theaters
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 are there to provide people with the one-station service to
statisfy
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satisfy
 their needs for refreshment and relaxation.
Moreover
, there are more job opportunities, bigger markets, and
labor
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 forces in the
city
 blessed with a large
polulation
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population
, without which there would be no
moderlization
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moderation
. Clearly,
life
 has been made easier and simpler thanks to the development of cities.
On the other hand
, the
country
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 living style appeals to the individuals who look forward to the slow pace of
life
 and natural landscape. In comparison to busy and hectic
life
 in a metropolis, the pace of
the
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country
life
 is at a much slower speed, allowing a person to rest and break
time
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 to time whether they are on the way home or to work. What is even more pleasing is the fact that natural theme parks are available within steps
in
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of
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 villages and people living there can
travle
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travel
 and trip freely, ridding of jammed traffic and long
wait
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 outside hot touring spots. Admittedly,
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the countrysides
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countrysides
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countryside
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 are ideal
places
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place
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 to enjoy great views of mountains and rivers, especially on holidays or at one's later stage of
life
. In conclusion, the
metroplitans
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metropolitans
metropolitan
 who look for great future prospects would embrace big cities,
whereas
 towns and villages are
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the destination
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destination
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 for the population seeking a
reating
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creating
rating
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 living style and close nature contact. Given the choices, I vote for the fulfilling and rewarding
city
life
.
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task response
Ensure a more balanced discussion of both views
coherence cohesion
Improve the transition and flow between paragraphs for a better coherence
lexical resource
Expand the range of vocabulary and use more precise and academic words
grammatical range
Work on sentence structures and grammar accuracy

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