The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016.

The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016.
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The line chart illustrates the stake
price
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of four companies from 2011 to 2016.
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, Facebook consistently increased, Apple
had
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dramatically fluctuated during the period, Yahoo had
a
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negative growth and Google
maintained
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flat in these five years. Facebook started
in
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the amount
of
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8,000 in 2011, it had
a
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steady growth, next
year
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it became 10,000 and it turned
double
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the amount in 2016. Apple was 5,000 in the first
year
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,
then
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it hit
the
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peak
to
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35,000 in the next
year
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.
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, it dropped to 6,500 in 2013 and ended up at 5,500 in the
last
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year
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. The stake
price
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of Yahoo was 7,500 in the beginning, it decreased half of the amount in two years, and in 2016 it dropped to about 2,500 which is one-third of the original
price
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. Apple
kept
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remained flat in these six years, the
price
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stayed at nearly 1,000 since the numbers were recorded.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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