The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018
The bar chart illustrates figures about the average percentage of weekly incomes spent on 8 divided categories in a particular country in the years 1968 and 2018.
It is clear that
in the later
years
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citizens of that country spent mostly on leisure activities and accommodations,
in contrast
with the past when buying food contained a higher amount of expenditure. In 1968, almost 35 percent of people's salaries went for purchasing food which was by far the highest figure out of 8.
Also
, the two second highest amount of money was spent on housing and clothing
while
the other 5 groups were lower with the least one for fuel and power, and the highest one for leisure which was hardly around 8
percent
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per cent
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. By 2018, the spending on food fell by
its
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half by close to 17 per
cent
and the opposite pattern can be seen in the amount of expenditure spent on housing, transportation and leisure which became higher with about 18, 14 and 22 per
cent
in
this
year respectively. Personal goods, footwear and power
also
fell by approximately 4 per
cent
. household goods were the same in both years with close to 3 per
cent
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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