As technology advances, traveling to space is likely to become an option for holidaysmakers in the future. What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of space tourism?
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especially
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travelling
space
is more common and this
trend may increase in the upcoming years. There are some pros and cons for this
approach and I will be demonstrating both benefits and drawback
in the ensuing paragraphs.
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costs
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it
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, it makes company
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a variety
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.
On the other side, space
exploration brings many disadvantages. Firstly
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money
and it always challenges the
diversity. Only humans who have Correct article usage
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money
can use the facilities and other people
cannot travel is such
a shaming for the country. Secondly
, it causes different health issues and it is dangerous in
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some times
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sometimes
However
, the disease can be curable but, if any problem occurs during the visit or launching time can be life threatening
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life-threatening
Finally
, some organization does not have enough products and making cost may double the amount that people
spend.
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tourism is increasing day by day and it obtain
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provides
people
like enhancing the
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economy
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