The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts give demographic information about marital status in
both
Australia and Canada. It is immediately noticeable that the vast majority of
people
in
both
countries are technically married.
However
, in Canada, the majority of these marriages have ended but the
people
USE SYNONYMS communitycrowdfamilyfolknationpopulationpublicsociety It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score. have not been divorced with 53% of the population being separated from their spouse.
This
is compared to only 41% in Australia where there is a significantly higher proportion of
people
still in their marriage. With regard to the other figures, they are relatively similar for
both
countries with slightly more Canadians never having been married or having lost their spouse and slightly more Australians being divorced.
However
, another striking fact is that there is three per cent of Canadians live in a same-sex marriage but there are no Australians in same-sex marriage recorded.
Overall
, we can see that the majority of
people
are either married or separated but not yet divorced in
both
countries.
However
, Canadians were more likely to have ended their relationships.
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