Today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

In
this
fast-paced
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and
individualistic world,
people
seem to ignore the appearance of their neighbours and fully devote their time to seeking
for
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money.
This
may ruin their social skills and solidarity in groups of
people
.
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the problem can be tackled by frequent meetings and
team building
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activities organized by the local authorities. It is an irrefutable fact that a lack of daily interactions can result in social skills deterioration.
This
is because most
people
find it hard to express their emotions and inner thoughts to strangers.
Consequently
, soft skills will be rusty and humans turn out to
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be
cranky and turn a blind eye to others' problems. For children whose perception has yet to
be fully develop
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, they observe and try to
immitate
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imitate
adults' behaviours, which means that our future generations are negatively influenced by the way we treat
people
today. Another alarming problem is related to unity. It is believed that
shortage
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of communication triggers sympathy among
people
and
this
is the root cause of
bickerings
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and
conficts
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conflicts
due to
different
mindset
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. If we know well about our neighbours, we can easily get on with each other and cooperate to find out the most effective approach for both.
Otherwise
, we might fall out with them and even create stress in
this
relationship. There are ways to alleviate
this
problem,
however
, the most efficient way is to organize local meetings so that everyone can gather and share their experience. We can
also
celebrate music
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as music has the power to bring
people
together. In conclusion,
people
knowing nothing about their neighbours can exert adverse effects.
Nevertheless
, we can cope with
this
issue by organizing more social activities for citizens.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Community spirit
  • Isolation
  • Surveillance
  • Safety and security
  • Vulnerability
  • Support networks
  • Local gatherings
  • Foster
  • Social media platforms
  • Neighbourhood watch
  • Emergency situations
  • Natural disasters
  • Shared resources
  • Crime rates
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