Today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

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seem to ignore the appearance of their neighbours and fully devote their time to seeking

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money.

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may ruin their social skills and solidarity in groups of

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the problem can be tackled by frequent meetings and

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activities organized by the local authorities. It is an irrefutable fact that a lack of daily interactions can result in social skills deterioration.

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is because most

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find it hard to express their emotions and inner thoughts to strangers.

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, soft skills will be rusty and humans turn out to

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cranky and turn a blind eye to others' problems. For children whose perception has yet to

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, they observe and try to

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adults' behaviours, which means that our future generations are negatively influenced by the way we treat

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today. Another alarming problem is related to unity. It is believed that

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of communication triggers sympathy among

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is the root cause of

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different

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. If we know well about our neighbours, we can easily get on with each other and cooperate to find out the most effective approach for both.

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, we might fall out with them and even create stress in

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relationship. There are ways to alleviate

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problem,

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, the most efficient way is to organize local meetings so that everyone can gather and share their experience. We can

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celebrate music

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as music has the power to bring

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together. In conclusion,

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knowing nothing about their neighbours can exert adverse effects.

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, we can cope with

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issue by organizing more social activities for citizens.

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Topic Vocabulary:

Community spirit
Isolation
Surveillance
Safety and security
Vulnerability
Support networks
Local gatherings
Foster
Social media platforms
Neighbourhood watch
Emergency situations
Natural disasters
Shared resources
Crime rates

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Today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

Fully explain your ideas

Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

It is important to be concerned about international events, even if those events have no direct impact on our lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think is a positive or negative development?