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Today,many people do not know their neighbors in large cities What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

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Nowadays.many
people
 lose connection with their
neighbor
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.
As a result
,citizens would experience a sense
pf
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of
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 loneliness and they could not get helped in emergent cases.
However
,it can be solved by organizing local
events
 to make a good relationship. One of the
result
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 of the problem is they will be
so
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 lonely.
This
 is
due to
 the shortage of time
people
 spend on
communication
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 with
other
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others
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 and
meet
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 their
neighbors
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 because of
the
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 busy lives so they have no energy to communicate with their neighbours on weekdays, and at the weekends they want to rest and regain their energy to start the week energetically.
Therefore
,
people
 will find their lifestyles
are
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boring. Another considerable result of losing connections is city dwellers could not ask for help in urgent cases.There are some situations that
people
 can not solve by themselves .To illustrate,citizens need to keep their pets on the holidays.
However
, there are some solutions to make free hours to socialize with each other.
Firstly
, most countries have some traditional
events
 nations celebrate.
People
 could plan a ceremony to celebrate these special
events
 together.
For instance
, they could gather in one’s home or if the building has a garden they could meet each other there.
In addition
, families who have children could let them play with each other and strike a friendship. In
this
 way, the child’s parents meet and get to know others’ parents as well. In conclusion,can not
relise
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realise
neighbor's
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 faces is a significant problem,it can be caused the loneliness and not being helped in emergent situations.But it can be solved by local
events
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sense of community
  • isolation
  • loneliness
  • support network
  • sense of security
  • trust
  • cooperation
  • social support
  • integration
  • community events
  • shared spaces
  • neighborly interactions
  • neighborhood watch programs
  • community engagement
  • technology
  • connect
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