Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extant do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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which is people tend to
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all of the information and eventually lead to
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For instance
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their university. It is all because
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everything they
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the internet make them interested and
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of
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that can help individuals to keep in touch with families and friends.
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which applications suit them.
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senior high school in 2022,
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three software to chat because their relatives
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new things to keep up with the technology. In conclusion, I extremely agree with a lot of choices we have in
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our knowledge
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The essay has several issues with coherence and cohesion, including logical structure, introduction and conclusion, and supported main points. Additionally, it lacks complete response, clear comprehensive ideas, and relevant specific examples. The lexical resource and grammatical range are also weak, with several errors in both aspects.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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