people naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kind of problems of problems can this cause? Whats solutions you can suggest?
In
this
real world, the number of people
who want their lives to become beautiful and spectacular is increasing exponentially from young age to middle age. In this
essay, it is not necessary and not obvious impact to jump out of the comfort zone or choose to stay in it all the time
are based on my considering. As you satisfy your life
in
the whole day as a vivid person is enough to compare most of the other things.
First of all, Change preposition
apply
forced
to accept all things is terrible from study or work, Add a missing verb
being forced
thus
, people
need tons of time
as they are free to stay in their comfort zone to relax is a fun fact without a doubt. Second,
not most people
already find a comfortable time
or space in their whole lives if they are lucky dogs. Therefore
, people
naturally do not think living their current life
is compulsory much less we do not want to make choices or changes in our lives because it consumes our spirit and body energy.
But to be honest, if they want nothing to change is also
a bad thing and a harmful choice. In my opinion, it will cause them may lose their persistence or something precious spirit in their reality life
because they do not want to face the challenge and overcome it while
some situation happens. I suggest you it
cut into half a part of your Correct pronoun usage
apply
life
, I mean, you can gap 1 year or 2 years to seek more adventure life
or change your home place such
as living in another country. It will help you to exchange your brain ideas as before or broaden your horizon
Fix the agreement mistake
horizons
while
you work or travelling
there.
Wrong verb form
travel
To sum up
, if you have enough time
and money you can go anywhere with anybody in a gap year when you realize you must exchange your environment based on your hometown. All in all, people
want to contain what is already in their life
is a very common thing in this
society, so we can not emphasise this
if everyone need
to change their spot as soon as possible but it is impossible.Change the verb form
needs
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