people naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kind of problems of problems can this cause? Whats solutions you can suggest?
In
this
real world, the number of Linking Words
people
who want their lives to become beautiful and spectacular is increasing exponentially from young age to middle age. In Use synonyms
this
essay, it is not necessary and not obvious impact to jump out of the comfort zone or choose to stay in it all the Linking Words
time
are based on my considering. As you satisfy your Use synonyms
life
Use synonyms
in
the whole day as a vivid person is enough to compare most of the other things.
First of all, Change preposition
apply
forced
to accept all things is terrible from study or work, Add a missing verb
being forced
thus
, Linking Words
people
need tons of Use synonyms
time
as they are free to stay in their comfort zone to relax is a fun fact without a doubt. Use synonyms
Second,
not most Linking Words
people
already find a comfortable Use synonyms
time
or space in their whole lives if they are lucky dogs. Use synonyms
Therefore
, Linking Words
people
naturally do not think living their current Use synonyms
life
is compulsory much less we do not want to make choices or changes in our lives because it consumes our spirit and body energy.
But to be honest, if they want nothing to change is Use synonyms
also
a bad thing and a harmful choice. In my opinion, it will cause them may lose their persistence or something precious spirit in their reality Linking Words
life
because they do not want to face the challenge and overcome it Use synonyms
while
some situation happens. I suggest you Linking Words
it
cut into half a part of your Correct pronoun usage
apply
life
, I mean, you can gap 1 year or 2 years to seek more adventure Use synonyms
life
or change your home place Use synonyms
such
as living in another country. It will help you to exchange your brain ideas as before or broaden your Linking Words
horizon
Fix the agreement mistake
horizons
while
you work or Linking Words
travelling
there.
Wrong verb form
travel
To sum up
, if you have enough Linking Words
time
and money you can go anywhere with anybody in a gap year when you realize you must exchange your environment based on your hometown. All in all, Use synonyms
people
want to contain what is already in their Use synonyms
life
is a very common thing in Use synonyms
this
society, so we can not emphasise Linking Words
this
if everyone Linking Words
need
to change their spot as soon as possible but it is impossible.Change the verb form
needs
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