Some people think that money must be spent on promoting the use of bicycles in cities while others think cities must spend on public transport discuss both views and give your opinion

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addiction 📌 Like other types of

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addictions, using social

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can influence

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your life.

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effects overusing social networking sites can result in many health and personal relationship problems

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seen in other addictions. The effects of social

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addiction include anxiety or depression. People addicted to social

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often experience weak eyesight and migraine The

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addiction include addictiveness, stress and self-esteem, and social anxiety. These factors drive a person to continue with the excessive use of social

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to clear out unpleasant feelings

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Time must be used efficiently, and parents must explain its harm to their children, and

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apply it for the better. The cause 2 Social

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use can affect users' physical health even more directly. Researchers know the connection between the mind and the gut can turn anxiety and depression into nausea, headaches, muscle tension, and tremors. Solution 2• Delete your social

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apps from your smartphone.Turn off your personal phone during work,

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during school, meals, and recreational activities.Set aside a certain amount of time dedicated to social

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we were not able to find direct and clear causation

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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227 words

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Some people think that money must be spent on promoting the use of bicycles in cities while others think cities must spend on public transport discuss both views and give your opinion

Fully explain your ideas

In many countries nowadays, more and more women have full-time jobs as men, so there is logic that men and women should share the housework tasks equally. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays transportation is a major problem in every developing city. Many people opine that it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than in public transport system. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Reading for pleasure can develop imagination and language skills better than watching TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who are choosing to educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do the advantages of home education outweigh the disadvantages?(nv)