You are going to study in a college in the UK next year. You would like to stay in a college Hall of Residence. Write a letter to the college. In your letter explain your accommodation requirements explain what your food needs are ask what alternatives are available if they cannot provide what you want You should write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir, I have recently been accepted to study at Marriot College for the coming academic year and would be very grateful if I could check a few details with you before making the move.
, I would like to confirm my preferred choice of accommodation. Having looked at the various options outlined in your prospectus I have decided I would feel most comfortable living in shared accommodation within a Hall of Residence. Living independently in a new city is quite a daunting prospect for me as I have never lived alone before, so I believe living with people in the same boat as me will make the experience easier. One
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preference is the fact that catering is provided in Halls of Residence.
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I am lactose intolerant, meaning I have to avoid all dairy products. Could you tell me whether there are lactose-free meals available on the menu for main meals
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and whether any soya-based alternatives to milk and yoghurt will be available to use at breakfast? Should shared accommodation and dairy-free meals prove to be unavailable, I would be very grateful if you could suggest an alternative residence or solution. I look forward to receiving your reply. Yours faithfully, Kenneth Coe
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Well done on addressing all the points in the prompt clearly and concisely.
coherence and cohesion
The logical structure is good, but the greeting and closing could be slightly more formal for a letter to a college.
lexical resource
Good use of a wide range of vocabulary, demonstrating a good grasp of lexical resource.
grammatical range
There are a few minor grammatical errors, particularly in the use of articles and prepositions. Make sure to review these for accuracy.
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