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Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #news #internet #newspapers #source
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 is considered as the only source of
news
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 back
then
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 when I was
child
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. Older people will sit and have a cup of tea. It's a great
memories
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 of our childhood but completely different
with
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 what happened these days. In my personal opinion, I disagree that
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newspaper
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 will remain the most important source of
news
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. Because of the
advance
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advances
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of
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in
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 technology, we can access
news
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 easily and comfortably within our
hand
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hands
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. The
news
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 they offer are real time which is the opposite
with
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newspaper
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 which we need to wait until the next day to get the headline
news
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.
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, some
newspaper
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 companies might have already realized
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this phenomena
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this phenomenon
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 and decided to move into digitalization. In conclusion,
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newspaper
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 will remain
as
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a good memories
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a good memory
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. Not going to lie, but as we can see, reading
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news
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 can be done
in
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wherever we are, as long as we are connected
by
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to
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internet
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the internet
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. Even the
newspaper
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 company realized
this
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 thing.
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task response
Ensure to fully address the prompt and provide a balanced argument.
coherence and cohesion
Organize ideas in a clear and logical manner, with effective use of linking devices.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary and more precise word choices to convey meaning.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and strive for more variety and accuracy in grammar.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliable
  • credible
  • focused
  • immersive
  • tangibility
  • tradition
  • access
  • digital devices
  • demographics
  • older generation
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