Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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Topic Vocabulary:

alternative medicines
treatments
positive development
negative development
health problems
usual doctor
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holistic well-being
lack of regulation
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