The charts below give information about the people use public library and the main reasons to visit in BritIain in 1991 and 2000

The charts below give information about the people use public library and the main reasons to visit in BritIain in 1991 and 2000
The pie charts show the proportion of
people
visiting
library
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libraries
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in the UK based on their reason
to visit
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for visiting
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in 1991 and 2000.
Overall
, in both years, most
people
visited
library
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the library
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to borrow or return
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the book
a book
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book
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books
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,
while
studying and reading
newspaper
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newspapers
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or
magazine
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magazines
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showed a
decrease
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decreasing
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trend. Both in 1991 and 2000, borrowing and returning
book
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books
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was the main reason for the majority of
people
to visit the
library
(65% and 55% proportion respectively). The number of
people
visited
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visiting
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the
library
to read
newspaper
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a newspaper
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or magazine decreased from 15% in 1991 to 5% in 2000.
In addition
,
people
that came to the
library
for study
also
showed the same trend (fell down from 10% in 1991 to only 2% in 2000).
On the other hand
, the remaining categories showed an
increase
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trend. The proportion of
people
that came to obtain information was only 10% in 1991 and doubled to 20% in 2000. Meanwhile, in 2000, there was one additional reason for
people
to visit the
library
, which was to borrow or return videos that summed up to 18% of the total visitors.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, library with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • data comparison
  • trends
  • usage patterns
  • visitors
  • accessibility
  • information resources
  • traditional libraries
  • online resources
  • technological advancements
  • community support
  • promoting literacy
  • educational resources
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