It is common for people to travel long distance for work and study.Some argue that longer commute times affect people in a negative way while others disagree. Discuss bothe views and give your opinion.

Even though
people
are very busy with their jobs
as well as
studies, they may experience a longer commute
time
.some
people
state that travelling long distances for work or study brings negative effects on them
while
others hold the opposite idea.In my point of view, it depends on the outcome of one's career commitment.In
this
essay, both views will be analysed to draw a conclusion. On one hand, most
people
struggle to make their goals realistic despite the challenges they face.
For example
, as good parenthood,
people
try to take their children to school in cities rather than in
countryside
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in order to provide them a student-friendly environment and better facilities for education.
Also
,
people
immigrate to town areas for services like supermarkets, health care, shopping complexes and public libraries regardless of
time
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the time
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they consume to reach and return.
Moreover
, individuals who
concerned
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about their careers,always try to identify more trends than issues in their job field and promotions as well.
As a result
,though the public spend
long
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duration in travelling,they receive better
outcome
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outcomes
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for their commitment in return.
On the other hand
,longer commute times cause more stress in
people
.
For instance
, if
somone
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someone
faces a traffic jam on the way to his job, he mentally  struggles with the
time
taken to reach the
work place
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workplace
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.
This
causes him
an
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emotional damage.As well, when returning home, everybody  wishes to arrive early to their destination and women reschedule the rest of the day for
house hold
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household
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dutoes
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duties
and plans for tomorrow. If it takes much
time
to travel,
people
may get tired easily and
fed-up
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fed up
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with household activities.
This
is an emotional burden.
To sum up
, apart from the mental disturbances, most of the public manage all those tasks enthusiastically  to achieve their goals.
Therefore
, long commute times do not always negatively impact the community.
However
, if the distribution of resources takes place with equal strength across society and if globalization positively affects rural areas as well, a better tomorrow will emerge.
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