Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.
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Task Response
The essay does not provide a clear stance and balanced discussion on the advantages of home schooling and attending school. It is important to address both sides of the argument and clearly state your opinion in the introduction.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay lacks a clear logical structure and coherence. It would benefit from a more organized and coherent flow of ideas. Additionally, the introduction and conclusion need to be more explicitly presented.
Lexical Resource
The lexical resource used in the essay is adequate, but there is a need for more varied and precise vocabulary to express ideas more effectively.
Grammatical Range
The essay demonstrates a range of grammatical structures, but there are frequent errors in sentence structure, verb tense, and word choice. It would benefit from more accurate and varied use of grammar.
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