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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured noodles are manufactured.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured noodles are manufactured.
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The provided diagram indicates the process of manufacturing instant noodles.
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, it is noticeable that the process consists of eight main stages, and all steps are progressed automatically without human beings' interference.
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 the first stage, flour is extracted from storage silos and taken to the considered manufactory by a special vehicle. Once the main ingredient is delivered, it is mixed with water and oil through a mixer.
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once the
dough
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 with the desired consistency is shaped, it is transferred through the rolling process to make
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 sheets. Having been rolled, the
dough
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 sheets are cut into strips afterwards.
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 the fifth step, the
dough
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 strips are shaped into discs in order to be cooked and dried at the following step. As soon as they are cooked and dried by oil, they are put into cups and simultaneously, seasoned with some vegetables and spices. At the final stage, these cups are labelled and sealed, before being ready to be distributed among supermarkets.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dough with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • mixing ingredients
  • dough preparation
  • sheeting
  • steaming
  • cutting techniques
  • dehydration
  • deep-frying
  • cooling system
  • packaging
  • quality control
  • production line
  • mass production
  • food preservation
  • convenience food
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