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the graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years

the graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years
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The shows line graph gives data on the changes
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in
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waste in tonnes over a period
15
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of 15
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 years between 2000 and 2015. It can be seen that the line graph, the extent of waste produced by the
company
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 A
droped
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dropped
considerbly
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considerably
. The level of
company
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 B was the shortest and
company
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 C the
was
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highest. The amount of scrap generated by
the
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apply
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company
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 A plunged slowly from 12% to 11% between 2000 to 2005 and went down
considerbly
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considerably
 from 11% to 8% between 2005 to 2015.The volume of garbage created by
the
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apply
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corporation B went up slightly from 8% to 10% between 2000 to 2015 after
plummeted
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plummeting
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 quickly from 10% in 2005 to 3% in 2015. The number of waste in tonnes in
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company
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Company
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 C rose steadily from 4% to 6% between 2000 to 2005
then
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 there increased sharply from 6% in 2005 to 10% in 2015.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words company with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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