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: It is often said that governments spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife, while there are other problems that are more important. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is commonly argued that spending too much
money
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 on those protective campaigns is considered a wasteful act.
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 of pouring
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 into that, it will be more worthwhile if governments take other problems into consideration. Personally, I completely agree with
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 view for a variety of reasons First of all, wild
animals
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 are not too valuable and influential
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 humans’ lives
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.
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, daily
life
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 of course does not depend on
animals
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, both subjects are not connected and dependent on each other. In fact, if there is a major decline in wildlife,
life
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 will go on as usual.
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, in many parts of the world, it is annually reported that a large number of wild
animals
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 have been illegally killed when everything in
life
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 still happens normally.
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, Those projects are not necessarily effective and attract the attention of many people.
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, wasting on animal protection campaigns is a huge waste of the state budget.
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, those countries can’t be successfully grown as they should be without the developments of other fields.
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 means that there are other problems about traffic, education or the safety of a nation which should be paid attention to.
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, in African countries, there is a huge lack of conveniences
such
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 as hospitals, schools, and roads. Improving and innovating these basic public services is absolutely crucial to human
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. It can
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 contribute to the growth of the economy and the level of education in the community there.
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, governments can pay
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 for the advanced scientific equipment to serve people’s lives. In conclusion, spending too much
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 on
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 protection projects causes a huge waste and is unfair to humans. In my opinion, there are different ways to prevent wild
animals
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 from dying and the authorities should spend more
money
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 on solving and improving other problems to enhance the quality of
life
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecological balance
  • safeguard
  • natural habitats
  • foster
  • cultural of conservation
  • long-term ecological sustainability
  • economic benefits
  • significant source of revenue
  • investment
  • nation’s economic wealth
  • preservation of ecosystems
  • clean water and air
  • prioritization
  • multi-faceted government budgets
  • environmental protection
  • wildlife conservation
  • neglecting
  • detrimental effects
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