The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
graph
illustrate
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the scenario of the sum of city-dwellers in four Asian countries between 1970 and 2000 with a prediction for 2030 and 2040. We can see here, from
very
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early period Malaysians are more likely to live in the
cities
and their city-living
rate
will
much
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more
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higher in future compared to
other
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the other
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three countries. The Thai
people
were not the
last
previously but in future, their city-living
rate
will be the lowest. In 1970, nearly 90% of the Thai
people
lived in the
cities
and about 14% of the Indonesian
people
were present in the
cities
. In 2000, The percentage of city-dwellers was 30% both for Thailand and Indonesia. Later, more
inhabitats
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inhabitants
of Indonesia came to live in the
cities
and the hate will be nearly 60% as the Prediction for 2040. The sum for Thailand will be under 60%.
On the other hand
, about 30%
people
of
Malaysia
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in Malaysia
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and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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were city-dwellers in 1970. The
rate
for Malaysia inclined sharply and continuously
that
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the
rate
will stand above 80% in 2040,
according to
the prediction.
Besides
, The
rate
for
Philippines
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the Philippines
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was 50% in 1990 but It faced a decline till 2010. Later,
then
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sum witnessed a sluggishninclinement and will stand at nearly 55% in 2040.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, rate, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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