some people say that the main enviromental problem of our time is the loss of partivcular species of plants and animlas. others say that there are more important enviromental problmes discuss both these views and give your opinion

While
some people believe that special plant and animal extinction is the prominent environmental issue we
confort
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confront
comfort
today, others claim that there are more vital reasons causing environmental problems.
This
essay will explore both perspectives and explain why I believe that some other reasons threaten a pleasant
environment
. On the one hand, biodiversity is a critical point to have a well-balanced ecosystem. It means that special plants and animals should be protected against dangers which make them become extinct. Since the imbalanced ecosystem damages other species'
life
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due to
the natural cycle .
For example
, the
life
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of all sea animals are threatened if
under
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sea plants
such
as coral die out.
On the other hand
,
emission
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of harmful gases is rapidly destroying the earth’s atmosphere, causing unpredictable climate conditions.
In other words
, man-made emerging disasters
such
as unlimited usage of energy, unawareness of maintaining the urban
environment
and
eliminating
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forests
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of forests
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cause global warming which could change
weather
patterns.
However
, preserving
weather
temperature so that it does not rise is
so
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critical to have a pleasant
environment
.
For instance
, research conducted in Iran
last
year explored that pollution arising from gases produced by factories is the main reason for warming
weather
and destroying the planet's habitat. In conclusion,
although
both viewpoints, the vital role of some species
plants
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and animals on
environment
and other problems, have their own merits, I believe that rising
weather
as a cause of emission gases like carbon dioxide and other manual damages is the main cause of having an unfavourable
environment
which should be mitigated with high priority.
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