The charts below give information about the people use public library and the main reasons to visit in BritIain in 1991 and 2000

The charts below give information about the people use public library and the main reasons to visit in BritIain in 1991 and 2000
The two pie charts present data about the
indivisuals
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individuals
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public
library
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and the main factors
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in
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Britain in two provided years.
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, people who visit the library
for borrowing
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or
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books
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the highest in the two years.
Additionally
,
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purpose to
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which is borrowing and
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returning
videos was introduced
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one
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the years.
Furthermore
, the only rise in percentage was in the reason of obtaining information. In both 1991 and
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2000,
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the borrow or return book was the highest with 65% and 55% respectively.
Moreover
, study and read newspaper or magazine percentages decreased in 2000 to
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2% and 5% respectively.
However
, the only
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was in
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infromation
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information
, the proportion was 10% in 1991 and grew to
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20% in 2000. In 2000, borrow or return videos
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introduced and the percentage of visitos was 18% which
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the third main reason.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • data comparison
  • trends
  • usage patterns
  • visitors
  • accessibility
  • information resources
  • traditional libraries
  • online resources
  • technological advancements
  • community support
  • promoting literacy
  • educational resources
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