In the last century the first man to walk on the moon said it was a great step for mankind . But in fact space travel has made little difference to most people lives today . To what extent do you agree or disagree.
A couple of decades ago, there were a
lot
of people
who tried to reach the moon
. It was a huge achievement for the country too. Today, this
activity seems usual for people
. There are several factors that affect this
condition.
In the past, people
who were walking on the moon
were a strange point. Humans thought that it was impossible to fly away to the moon
. It needed modern technology and huge money to build a spacecraft. Besides
, people
had to wear special uniforms to adapt to the moon
’s condition. Then
, companies or even countries
challenged their capabilities to reach the moon
’s surface for the first time. They could do some research
about the moon
and it was a great step for mankind. This
research
about the moon
is still needed by science and humankind today. To illustrate, the moon
's eclipse will have an impact on sea level and it will forecast the weather. Then
, the fisherman can know the good and bad conditions of fishing in the middle of the sea. However
, there is a lot
of mystery about the moon
that has not cracked yet.
On the other hand
, today, a lot
of countries
are bored with doing the same things as a decade before. They try to develop new research
and shift their goals. For example
, they will search for a new earth
so people
can migrate from Earth
to a new planet. Besides
, researchers focus on the space debris that will have an impact on the Earth
's surface. They learn and analyse how big an impact is if these objects collide with the earth
. Another example, many countries
focus on space defence so they can protect their people
and assets.
In conclusion, I disagree with people
who are bored talking about walking on the moon
because there are a lot
of people
from several countries
who have reached it. The moon
itself has a huge enigma so we have to solve it and do some research
. The result will help humankind to develop something beneficial in the future.Submitted by irhamtaufiqurrahman on
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