There have been some problems with public transport in your area recently. Write a letter to the manager of the transport company. In your letter -describe the problems -explain how these problems are affecting the public -suggest some changes that could be made.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
letter regarding the recent issues I have with Trans Metro Bandung
due to
many problems with the
bus
idling. I am Hendra a permanent resident of Mekarwangi Square. The major problem of Trans Metro Bandung in my area is that the
bus
idling around the corner of a traffic light near Purbaleunyi Toll Gate. Sometimes that creates a traffic problem around the corner area, and it can take half hour for the
bus
to move.
On the contrary
,
passengers
want to sit and relax rather than get hassled
with
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the congestion and horn sounds. Other than that, the
bus
kept
caught
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speeding when it was nighttime and deserted roads. It can dangered the
passengers
,
also
other road users.
Bus
drivers are thinking more about chasing deposits, regardless of safety. To resolve
this
issue, I highly recommend selectively choosing a driver with the best service,
that
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passengers
can sit happily.
Additionally
,
government
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needs to pay a monthly deposit, rather than collecting money from
passengers
, resulting
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in driversthinking
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driversthinking
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drivers thinking
more about safety. Thank you and Regards
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Address all parts of the task fully and provide a complete response.
coherence and cohesion
Organize the letter into clear paragraphs with each paragraph having a central topic.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to express ideas more precisely and use language that is suitable in a formal letter.
grammatical range
Use a variety of sentence structures with accurate use of grammar and punctuation.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plaguing
  • delays
  • frustration
  • inconvenience
  • productivity
  • rely on
  • daily commute
  • overall
  • condition
  • deteriorated
  • overcrowded
  • seating arrangements
  • compromises
  • safety
  • comfort
  • impacts
  • hygienic
  • maintenance
  • unpleasant
  • alternative
  • modes of transportation
  • congestion
  • pollution
  • fuel consumption
  • proposed
  • infrastructure
  • upgrading
  • expanding
  • cater to
  • growing population
  • focus on
  • regular maintenance
  • breakdowns
  • hire
  • train
  • customer service
  • overcrowding
  • expectations
  • managing
  • minimizing
  • appropriate action
  • reliable
  • efficient
  • sustainable
  • benefits
  • entire community
  • Thank you for your attention to this matter.
  • Yours faithfully
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