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The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.
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The bar chart describes why adults go into
education
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 and the pie chart shows who the respondents think should pay for it.
People
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 mostly go into
education
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 out of interest, and, perhaps unsurprisingly,it is believed that they should pay for it themselves.
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 the data, forty
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percent
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 of adults go into
education
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due to
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 some sort of interest in
aparticular
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a particular
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 thirty-eight
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 do it to gain qualifications. These are far and away the most common reasons, as the next most frequently cited reason was almost half
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 value. Several reasons were picked by about twenty
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 of
people
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, including the fact that it may help them earn a promotion at work. The least frequently stated answer was that adult
education
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 is a good way to meet new
people
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. The survey results showed forty
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percent
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 of
people
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 believe the individual should pay the costs of a course.
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 did these courses purely out of interest.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words education, people, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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